This is for Flash Fiction Month. I was thinking about the idea of heartstrings and this is what I came up with. Please tell me what you think. Yes, there is gore in this, but no sex. Haha, I missnamed this originally. Sorry.
namenameoneFeatured By OwnerAug 28, 2012Student Digital Artist
This is a decent little piece, except for a few word confusions at the end. Like, instead of "Dipping his heart into her..." I think you meant "hand." And "her" instead of "he" a couple lines down from that. Otherwise, this is fine. A bit rushed feeling, if you don't mind my saying so, could've used a bit more build up on atmosphere and such. The flow is okay though, and the word choice is good. So an adequate job, overall.